Example for Grade 7: Narrative – Mount Everest - ID: 933

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Mount Everest

  • Purpose: Narrative
  • Grade: 7
  • ID No. 933

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The day i heard about mount everest i wonted to clime it. so the next day i looked up mount everest and found out it takes years of trianing and some necessary climbing eequipment. so that what i been doing for the past 3 years i have been training to climb mount everest. and now i got what it takkes to climb mount everst.

So i went and drove there and started to climb. after a while i was a able to get to a spot were i could set up camp for the night. so i got out my tent and spent the night there. the next morning i got up packed my things and started to climb. from there on out it was a easy hike in till we got to the part were we need to clime up the mountin its self. when we were climbing the moutin we had to be carefull beacuse we could of sliped or rockes could have fallen on us so we had to to take it slow.by the time we got to a spot to set up camp it was midnight.

the next morning we we start to climb but found out there wasent much air up were we were so we had to stop and get uses to the air up there. later we put on maskes that would allow us the breath up there. the next day was the day were we were able to get to the top of mount everest.that is my  story on how i was able to climb mount Everest