Example for Grade 7: Narrative – Mount Everest - ID: 928
As I planned to take a trip to climb Mount Everest I told my friends Dale, Susan, and Bob. They said they wanted to comne with me I told them they had to pay for themselves and bringh there own gear. They told me they would pay if we all drove up together. So right there we left and bought some gear for our trip. In all the gear we bought the total was $1,500 dollars. As we got ready to leave for the trip Susan called and said ” I am not going to be able to make it because i have to stay home with the kids.” We all got sad and said we were sorry she couldn’t go but we would miss her. So around 5:00 o’clock we left for Mount Everest. It took us almost a full day to get there but once we did we found out how cold it really was.
Once we settled in because we new we would be there for a little while. we went and got changed so we could start our hike. When dale was tryiung to put his clothes on he yeld out ” My pants and jacket don’t fit. Bob and I yeled ” WHAT are you talking about.” ” They don’t fit.” Okay than you just stay here and we will go up said, Bob and I. Then Bob cried and said he did not want to go anymore and we drove all the way home because nobody wanted to do the trip anymore. SO we wasted all the that money and ended up not going what a trip that was.