Example for Grade 7: Narrative – Mount Everest - ID: 925

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Mount Everest

  • Purpose: Narrative
  • Grade: 7
  • ID No. 925

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one day i had a choice to climb mount everest se me and my family got a handbook and tryed to look for everthing we needed to survive and help us climb. once we got every thing we headed up there and statred to climb. as we vere climbing we saw alot of intresting things we thought it was just snow and other disgusting things up there but ere were shining rocks and we meet other peoples dogs while we were up there. a few hours or minutes later we re staring to get highier and highier and we as we get higher we saw a wonderful wew, when we were going we saw alot of animlals wondering everywhere and we didnt know they were owned if they live up there or not se just peted them and said hi and let them wonder every where. mom said the wiew is geting more wonderful and ot biggier as we got to the top we were just siting there and looking at the wonderfil big wew