Grade 4

Narrative

Writing Extended Response

Compose Full Texts

Ant Colony

Conventions

Development/Elaboration

Organization/Purpose

The sentence “one day me and my friend Tom smelled some crackers and got up and saw a big grape just then I  was walking and fell into a big hole” is a run on.
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There are frequent capitalization errors at the beginning of sentences.
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There are punctuation errors. “HELP  I screamed.Than” is not punctuated correctly for dialogue.

There are some errors in grammar usage with frequently confused words (“than” instead of &#8220;then&#8221;) and also with pronoun usage (“one day me and my friend Tom smelled some crackers.”).
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There are several spelling errors (e.g., “smellled,” “coliny,” “chalenging,” “whith,” “relezied”).

This brief response is weakly developed. The few attempts to integrate information from the source materials are more confusing than helpful (“[we] needed a queen,…but then the queen ant just fell into the hole”).

Other details (e.g., about food – crackers and grapes) are not well integrated, nor are they elaborated.

Narrative techniques are minimal: dialogue is limited to “HELP,” and there is almost no description for any other plot elements.

The language is vague (”lots of ants came and picked up all the food,” “we built our on colony. It was very chalenging…”).

There is a weak attempt at style (sarcasm: “they wont just fall out of the sky”).

The brief response includes a beginning that provides a cursory introduction to two characters, later introducing “Gym the mean ant” and a queen, whose sudden appearance leads to a simplistic finish (THE END).

There is a vague conflict (they fell into a hole and had to build their own colony). The setting is confusing: the characters are initially described as “in the any coliny,” but then they fall “into a big hole” and build their own colony (the queen also “fell into the hole”). Such inconsistencies interfere with a logical sequence of events.

The repetitive phrases “One day” and  “Than” (then) fail to provide unity.

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An annotation is the educator’s explanation of how a portion of the student’s response relates to the rubric and contributes to that trait’s score. For example, the educator might explain how the response meets the expectations of a specific score point. An annotation can also describe aspects of a student response that relate to multiple score points on the rubric to demonstrate nuance when determining a score.

Annotation

One of three traits scored for the ELA performance task full write, this trait measures a student’s ability to demonstrate command of grade-level conventions of standard English: grammar usage (including sentence formation), capitalization, punctuation, and spelling.

This trait measures students’ ability to select and integrate details that support, explain, illustrate, or develop ideas. Students should elaborate these details—that is, explain and connect them, guided by the writing purpose and audience needs.
For informative/explanatory and opinion/argumentative writing purposes, these details come from source materials.
For narrative writing, this trait is called Development/Elaboration, and students are expected to integrate and develop grade-appropriate story elements such as descriptive details and dialogue. For these tasks, events and experiences are inspired by source materials.

Evidence/Elaboration

This trait measures students’ ability to establish and sustain a focus for the writing. This focus should be consistent with the task’s designated purpose and the intended audience. Strong introductions and conclusions (or, for narrative writing, beginnings and endings) and transitions help to create coherence.

Performance tasks measure a student’s ability to demonstrate critical-thinking and problem-solving skills by challenging students to apply their knowledge and skills to complex, real-world problems. In the performance task, students are presented with a collection of questions and activities connected to a single theme or scenario. These activities ask students to demonstrate capacities such as depth of understanding, writing and research skills, and complex analysis, which cannot be adequately assessed with traditional assessment questions. Performance tasks are taken on a computer (but are not computer adaptive) and take students one to two class periods to complete.

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The prompt is the text provided to the student that requests their response. It includes some contextual information, but also includes a specific task that students complete in their writing response.

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“Purpose” is the context for a piece of writing, or what the writer intends to accomplish. Students write texts with the following purposes:
<ul>
<li>Narrative (grades 3–8): tell a story</li>
<li>Informational (grades 3–5): present facts or data using source material</li>
<li>Explanatory (grades 6–11): explain a topic or concept by analyzing source materials</li>
<li>Opinion (grades 3–5): present and defend a position</li>
<li>Argumentative (grades 6–11): present an argument using research to form and support claims</li>
</ul>
Purposes have subtle differences depending on grade, and each writing purpose has its own scoring rubric.

Purpose

This text was written by a student in response to a Performance Task writing prompt.

Response

A rubric is a set framework for scorers to reference when determining the quality of student writing. Each trait has its own rubric, and every point value is defined in detail with examples of what to expect from student writing at each level.

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Traits are different dimensions of a student response that educators evaluate when scoring. For example, an educator will assess grammar and spelling as part of the Conventions trait (maximum of two score points) but not take grammar or spelling into account when assessing the other traits. This approach ensures that scorers evaluate student writing from multiple angles.

Example for Grade 4: Narrative – Ant Colony - ID: 728

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