Example for Grade 4: Narrative – Ant Colony - ID: 728

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Ant Colony

  • Purpose: Narrative
  • Grade: 4
  • ID No. 728

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I my name is Fred the ant and I love food. One day my friend Tom and I were in the ant coliny and I  smellled some new food .lots of ants came and picked up all the food . We live on a farm because a farm has lots of food. one day me and my friend Tom smelled some crackers and got up and saw a big grape just then I  was walking and fell into a big hole. HELP  I screamed.Than Tom jumped down. than me and Tom saw a hole bunch of other ants. that night there was no way that we could get out so we built our on colony. It was very chalenging but we made it work in no time. than we relezied we cant have a ant colony whith out a queen ant so we started looking around confused . than Gym the mean ant said they wont just fall out of the sky. HELP I looked up and it was a queen ant that fell into the hole. than she said that she would be part of th ant colony. THE END