Example for Grade 4: Narrative – Ant Colony - ID: 720

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Ant Colony

  • Purpose: Narrative
  • Grade: 4
  • ID No. 720

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One day I was taking a walk and all of a sudden  .  .  .  I started shrinking and I fell into the ground. I ended up in an ant colony. ” What is this place?” I said out loud to myself. There were ants everywhere,they all seemed do be in different groups doing different things.

The first thing I saw were ants that were building something, getting food for the other ants, and guarding the place that I was in. I also saw ants that were leaving and were looked like they were going out to get more food.The last thing I saw was a giant ant. It must have been a queen ant. “Wait,” I thought for a few minutes, “I’ve seen this place in a book before, oh yeah its called an ant colony!”

Now that I at least know were I am I have to find a way out of here. “Hey what happended to the hole that I fell through, Its gone.” I could’ve found a way to go back through the hole and everything would be back to nromal. Welll i obviously can’t get out thruogh there