Example for Grade 4: Narrative – Ant Colony - ID: 709

for this response.

Ant Colony

  • Purpose: Narrative
  • Grade: 4
  • ID No. 709

Student Response

Scoring & Annotations

Oh my gosh!  I don’t know what happened, but I shrank to an ant’s size today! Some of the ants took me to their colony and I met the queen.  Their home was nice and all, but I felt wierd as some of the other ants were glaring at me.  The queen ant decided for me to become part of the ant colony and I wasn’t so sure.  I missed my parents and thought how worried they would be.  Later as I looked around the ants’ home, the queen told me to be a scout ant.  I never thought I would be given a job, but I made some ant friends and got along with them.

It was actually sort of fun!  But as I looked for food with the others, it got dark.  I thought if the day already ended but NO!!!!  A human was about to step on me!!! I warned the others to run away, but I tripped as I was scampering.  I tripped on a piece of food!  The human was trying to help me find food!  I was so greatful that I wasn’t squashed.  As I stood up, the ants saw the food and called for the other ants to help get the food to the home.

The other scout ants told all about the adventure I had to the queen and she was suprised!  She wanted to do something in return for me, so she asked me what I wanted most.  I told her that I wanted to get back home where I came from.  She was sad, but did what I wanted.  Before that though, she asked me if I could join their feast.  I was hungry, so I agreed.  The feast was great and I had a wonderful time!!!  After the wonderful feast, Iwas sent back home and was back to normal.