Example for Grade 4: Narrative – Ant Colony - ID: 701

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Ant Colony

  • Purpose: Narrative
  • Grade: 4
  • ID No. 701

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One day I was siting on my grass. Than I went inside to get a snack . I came back outside and I looked around and found a ant hill .  I went over there I got a cup and I dumped it on the ant hill. I started walking back to my house . Than I turned in to a small person . Ants sarted picking me up . I looked and they took me in there hill . I said ” where am I , why am I here .” Than a lot of  ants were  steping on me with there six tiny legs, they were touching me with there antennae . Then they picked me up again . They took me to the queen ant.            I looked at the queen . She said ” why did you flood my home . ” ” I don’t know .” Then the queen told the soldiers took me away . But then she said ” stop let her go home,I want tt see if we let her go . ” The girl did change and she became nice and friends with the ants .

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