Example for Grade 3: Narrative – Astronauts - ID: 669

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  • Purpose: Narrative
  • Grade: 3
  • ID No. 669

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Travling in space

When I was little I wanted to be a asternot. But I didn’t know how hard it was.

Before you could go to space you have to train. You maby have to learn how to staer a rocket ship.  Space to because your bones get weak.When you have done that you will have to do exersises and in space because your bones get weak. When you finish all of it you will go on a spaceship! When you get to space the real challege begins.

It is not easy to be a asternot. When you are in space you may not want to be the leader because it is do or die. If you are in space blood flows up to your head and makes you neck puffy and less blood flows to your legs they call this condition “bird legs”. In space thier is lots of jobs thier is a person who might just learn about sience because if somthing on your spaceship breaks they could fix it. Someone will learn how to stear a spaceship and their are way more jobs because maby more then 8 people can be on a spaceship.

To get home it is not easy it will be easy if you just go strait but if you go rights and lefts it will be hard. When you get use to your puffy neck and bird legs. But you will have to get use to your human legs again. If you like space you may not want to go home.

Space is a fun place to be but it is still hard work. If you want to know more about space or about asternots you could do some resherch and you might have a  answer for you quetion.