Example for Grade 3: Narrative – Astronauts - ID: 599

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  • Purpose: Narrative
  • Grade: 3
  • ID No. 599

Student Response

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“5”…”4”…”3”…”2” “1”… “BLASToff!”

“I’m very exited to go in space” exclaimed Even

“Don’t get to exited” Joe said calmly

“Why” anctiqued Even  “Oh wait it’s because that Even explained

youre body changes and you need to exersiez”

“Yes” Joe said. When they were in space

“Joe what if we crash on an alian’s planet” Even asked “then…RUN” Joe screamed.

“can you keep it down?!” Hannah said angerly ”Yea” replied Emma  “I hope I don’t get the condition bird legs” Even said nervously  “Oh you won’t we are not going to be at the moon for long we are just resting on the moon and taking some small rocks and bringing them back” Joe explained.

“Also bird legs is not that bad” said Emma “Seriously do you even know what the condition bird legs is” “yes” Emma said anoyed “then what is it” Even said

Emma replied “bird legs is a condition when blood flows to youre legs making then skinnier” “Not that I think about it it’s still bad  but not as bad as other conditions” Even said. “We are crashing” the pilot yelled. Everyone “AHHHHHHH” when they crashed “Where are we” Emma whispered (and they do have their space suits on) “I don’t know” Even whispered back “AHHH” Hannah screamed “HANNAH” Even Emma and Joe screamed “OH NO We are on an alein’s planet” Even said loudly “Well be quiet we have to whisper” Emma whispered. “Now to save Hannah” after they saved Hannah now let’s go home” Even said “I finnaly fixed it” Even replied happy

When they got home Evens mind I want to go there again.