Grade 5

Narrative

Writing Extended Response

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Whales

Conventions

Development/Elaboration

Organization/Purpose

Although the brief response strings together independent clauses, especially in the first sentence, these stylistically awkward sentences do not reflect sentence errors.

The response shows a lack of quotation marks for dialogue (&#8220;it’s breaching&#8221;) and missing commas to separate the many strung-together independent clauses.

There are errors with capital letters for the pronoun &#8220;I&#8221;.

There are some inconsistent verb tenses (“got&#8221;; &#8220;get”), so given the brevity of the response, this demonstrates only partial control of the convention.

There are only two misspelled words (“o;n”; “foun”), but given the brevity of the response, this demonstrates only partial control of the convention.

The brief response fails to develop an experience/event.

There is an attempt to include information about breaching.

There is an attempt at including dialogue (“…I heard someone yell it’s breaching&#8221;), but otherwise, the use of narrative techniques is inadequate.

The response is too brief to demonstrate appropriate language for a story.

There is an attempt to engage the reader (e.g., “…looking out at the water and splash a huge blue whale came out of the water”), but overall the response is too brief to demonstrate narrative style.

The brief response lacks any actual story; “splash a huge blue whale came out of the water” is the only detail that alludes to an actual experience/event.

No characters are established (the narrator is assumed to be “I,” but no other details are presented), and no details about the setting are given.

There are few transitions other than “3 weeks into our trip” and “The next night”. The response is too brief to demonstrate a cohesive narrative.

The response is too brief (there is only a single event) to demonstrate any narrative progression.

There is a weak attempted beginning (“We got to the boat…”) and an abrupt ending.

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An annotation is the educator’s explanation of how a portion of the student’s response relates to the rubric and contributes to that trait’s score. For example, the educator might explain how the response meets the expectations of a specific score point. An annotation can also describe aspects of a student response that relate to multiple score points on the rubric to demonstrate nuance when determining a score.

Annotation

One of three traits scored for the ELA performance task full write, this trait measures a student’s ability to demonstrate command of grade-level conventions of standard English: grammar usage (including sentence formation), capitalization, punctuation, and spelling.

This trait measures students’ ability to select and integrate details that support, explain, illustrate, or develop ideas. Students should elaborate these details—that is, explain and connect them, guided by the writing purpose and audience needs.
For informative/explanatory and opinion/argumentative writing purposes, these details come from source materials.
For narrative writing, this trait is called Development/Elaboration, and students are expected to integrate and develop grade-appropriate story elements such as descriptive details and dialogue. For these tasks, events and experiences are inspired by source materials.

Evidence/Elaboration

This trait measures students’ ability to establish and sustain a focus for the writing. This focus should be consistent with the task’s designated purpose and the intended audience. Strong introductions and conclusions (or, for narrative writing, beginnings and endings) and transitions help to create coherence.

Performance tasks measure a student’s ability to demonstrate critical-thinking and problem-solving skills by challenging students to apply their knowledge and skills to complex, real-world problems. In the performance task, students are presented with a collection of questions and activities connected to a single theme or scenario. These activities ask students to demonstrate capacities such as depth of understanding, writing and research skills, and complex analysis, which cannot be adequately assessed with traditional assessment questions. Performance tasks are taken on a computer (but are not computer adaptive) and take students one to two class periods to complete.

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“Purpose” is the context for a piece of writing, or what the writer intends to accomplish. Students write texts with the following purposes:
<ul>
<li>Narrative (grades 3–8): tell a story</li>
<li>Informational (grades 3–5): present facts or data using source material</li>
<li>Explanatory (grades 6–11): explain a topic or concept by analyzing source materials</li>
<li>Opinion (grades 3–5): present and defend a position</li>
<li>Argumentative (grades 6–11): present an argument using research to form and support claims</li>
</ul>
Purposes have subtle differences depending on grade, and each writing purpose has its own scoring rubric.

Purpose

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A rubric is a set framework for scorers to reference when determining the quality of student writing. Each trait has its own rubric, and every point value is defined in detail with examples of what to expect from student writing at each level.

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Traits are different dimensions of a student response that educators evaluate when scoring. For example, an educator will assess grammar and spelling as part of the Conventions trait (maximum of two score points) but not take grammar or spelling into account when assessing the other traits. This approach ensures that scorers evaluate student writing from multiple angles.

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