Example for Grade 6: Narrative – Robots - ID: 4132

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  • Purpose: Narrative
  • Grade: 6
  • ID No. 4132

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One day there was a boy named Andrew. He was going to school and was ready to learn some more math and study really hard for the next test that they were going to take the next week.Then after school was over he walked home and then turned on the T.V. and was loooking for something to watch.Then when his mom came home he changed it to the news and they both watched it.Then the next day after school Andrew’s mom took him to the store so that he can buy a new toy to play with.When they got to the store Andrew’s mom took him to the toy section,and there it was,the perfect toy.It was barely the new toy and Andrew was just about to buy the first one.Then he got the toy and then they went home and he started to play his new toy right away.He played with his toy for a hour and then went to go take shower.Before he went in the shower he left his robot on his counter and when he got out of the shower his robot was under the bed and Andrew thought that that was really wierd.The next day Andrew went to school and when he came back he couldnt find his robot so he looked everywhere and had found his robot in his closet.But he was so shocked and he just found out that his robot was alive.He was shocked and his mom went running to him all worried and he told her that his robot was alive and she went to go check and she grabed Andrew and her car keys and left the house.Then she called the police to get it out of her house and then the police station used the robot for good things that the police couldn’t explain to anybody!